Disappointment... and a new story has begun!

Absolute rejection!
After the rough-cut, I have made several changes in the story.
It has improved by now and clearer the situation between the teacher (Maurine) and the little girl (Liz).
It was essential, because it was a bit complicate earlier. It could have worked as it was, but not in 1-2 mins.
So I made the right decision and simplify the story again for the best.